在AO3更新的感觉还挺好的
有读者很认真的给我回复了呢：
Its a little rough but the story definitely isn't bad. I would've however been a little more distinct in differentiating between the two worlds because i got a little confused at first.
As for who is betaing or looking this over needs to look it over a couple more times. Sentences are unclear and mashed together and can be incoherent as to what you wanted to actually say.
这人第一段的意思是，我两个世界线一开始混在一起让人分不清吧？最开始确实是这样吧，唉，我以为我每章前面都标个ABO杭州，ABO北京，北京，再加上我的标题里一直都有《交换世界ABO》，大家就差不多都能理解和知道了，看来并不是这样啊...
她说我的第二段话，我不太知道是啥意思，遣词造句逻辑不分明词不达意？真想知道她具体说的是什么啊，或者，是整体都给人这个感觉？
总之，哪怕就是写个公路驾驶文，我也是欢迎这种探讨和批评建议的。
希望大家如果有什么建设性意见，都可以直接地告诉我，谢谢！
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